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Nowadays, we are living in a throw-away society. What are its causes and what are its problems? What could be done to address this issue?

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Today we live in a world where we face multiple Problems and one of the common difficulties that can be addressed is thrown away.
Although
 there are many reasons behind
this
 issue and we face a number of difficult situations, if Proper steps can be taken within the shortest possible time,
this
 social phenomenon can be resolved. There are several reasons behind the throw-away problem in our society.
First,
it belongs to the mindset of
people
 which becomes a common tendency that after using a product it should be thrown away.
Secondly
 in today's world
people
 have become commercialized and busy in their daily activities. It is easy for someone to
use
 anything and throw it away, rather than keep It for
further
use
. Problems that occur by throw-aways are very dangerous to describe.
Firstly
, some
items
 which is thrown away after
use
 cause harmful effects on the environment, and some
items
 are disposable to soil which causes long-term impacts on our environment.
Furthermore
, one-time
use
 of one thing means the production of that Product on a regular basis. For Producing any
items
 extra money is required which may impact economically in the long run.
For instance
, polyethene bags which we
use
 today an indispensable
items
 to Soil and
this
 leads to the fertility of soil.
This
 is high time that we come forward to take the required actions to address
this
 global problem. Social awareness can play a vital role in
this
 case. If
people
 are aware of the seriousness of
this
 problem,
then
 they might take the necessary steps to overcome it.
For instance
, we can see recycle labels on some Products, which make
people
 think about reusing
instead
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 of throwing them away.
Moreover
, reused products should be introduced more and more, which may easily lead to reduced one-time
use
.
To conclude
, it can be said finding out the major causes and informing
people
 about their consequences, global Society should come up with effective solutions to resolve as soon as possible.
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