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Many parents feel that cell phones are harmful to children, while others do not. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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There is no denying the fact that the main impact of having
cell
phones
 for kids is arguable. It is widely believed that mobiles are harmful to
children
.
However
, there are a lot of people against
this
 statement.
This
 essay will explain why
children
 should have mobile
phones
.
First
 of all,
cell
phones
 can be an extra source for learning.
This
 is because of the plethora of electronic books that are available,
moreover
, more than 70 % of them are free of charge.
Additionally
, a recent study shows that learning from devices is two times faster than books.
For instance
, most young
children
 presently know the numbers and colours even before going to school.
Secondly
,
phones
 play a key role in terms of reachability and emergencies.
This
 means that when a boy or a girl could not find his\her parents at a big mall, simply he\she can use the phone and call them. When it comes to emergencies,
last
 month,
for example
, a child managed to save his house from burning by using his
cell
 phone in order to call the police at the right time.
In contrast
, a lot of fathers and mothers refuse to give their
children
 a phone because of addiction and inappropriate advertisements. Despite that there are plenty of good sides to mobile, some kids cannot leave it at all,
this
 resulted in addiction and
thus
 increases the chance of autism.
Furthermore
, the inability to control the advertisements is something that deserves to be considered when giving a MobilePhone to kids. To conclude,
although
cell
phones
 have a dark side like contributing to addiction which sometimes leads to autism, still the beneficial sides of mobiles in learning and acting in emergencies outweigh them in my opinion.
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