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Some argue that schools should prioritize life skills such as working in teams and solving problems instead of traditional academics. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#argue #schools #prioritize #life #skills #teams #academics
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It is believed by some that the curriculum of
school
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 should be altered, centralizing real-
life
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skills
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 rather than traditional theories.
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 traditional academics are crucial to
learn
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, l believe that the importance of studying
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-helpful
skills
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lead
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 to better future prospects at
school
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overall
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. These days, traditional academics are admitted to be useful for several reasons.
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, structured learning can be developed, supporting each child to stay focused. Because,
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approach
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of
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 learning requires students to attend every class on time with special resources, mainly giving theories, information and facts by sharpening their minds and improving
skills
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,
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 as imagination, critical thinking and
problem solving
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 efficiently.
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, access to
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 might be another positive side of
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 teaching style. That style usually demands children to focus on each subject equally and offer resources related to every subject, making them to be informative. When they experience
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academic challenges, overcoming them with ease might be a result.
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,
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 approach can be a key to successful learning as a whole.
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, mastering
life
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skills
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 at
school
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 would be far more beneficial because of real-
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situation
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 and strong passion. The prioritization of
life
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skills
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 at
school
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 may lead to
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 talents of children as they usually are organised in
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life
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situation
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, thereby pressurizing them to find a solution to a problem or
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 with real experiments, making it more memorable and engaging. Another outcome can be the passion. Unlike traditional
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, children have a tendency to acquire knowledge in real
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. Since, it gives a sense of grasping and
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 their lifelong
skills
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,
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 as working in a team or
problem solving
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. As an example,
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those
 who participated
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in volunteering
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 work can mitigate issues effectively as opposed to those who mainly absorbed information without
real-kife
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real-life
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 events. So, modern
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ways
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 of teaching via real-
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 studies are far more necessary in
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 fast-paced
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. In conclusion, even though traditional methods seem to have a strong influence in terms of access to information and organised schedule, l believe that
moder
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modern
 style can be the only way to quality education.
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task achievement
Make sure to include specific examples or evidence to support your arguments more effectively.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph flows smoothly to enhance the overall coherence of the essay.
coherence cohesion
Try to maintain consistent terminology when discussing the central ideas, whether referring to 'traditional academics' or 'real-life skills.'
coherence cohesion
Clear introduction and conclusion that articulate your stance on the topic.
task achievement
You have effectively addressed both sides of the argument, which shows a balanced perspective.
coherence cohesion
The essay logically progresses from the introduction to the conclusion, maintaining a clear structure throughout.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Prioritize
  • Life skills
  • Traditional academics
  • Teamwork
  • Problem-solving
  • Holistic education
  • Real-world challenges
  • Soft skills
  • Intellectual growth
  • Balanced education
  • Comprehensive skill set
  • Core subjects
  • Vocational training
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