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Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is no argument that free
health
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 service is one of the most important welfare that every
country
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 should include in its priorities. The technology of medical treatment nowadays grows up too fast. The cost of
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 huge, so I personally agree that every
country
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 should have a free
health
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 service, but should not cover the expensive cost of new medical services. In the following paragraphs, my agreement reasons will be outlined in detail before a conclusion is reached.
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, In many developing countries, peoples in these countries are very poor and undergraduates. The government supports their help care through insurance policies that are not enough for some decrease, and people in that
country
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 do not have knowledge about
health
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. Their
health
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 is in bad condition, so these countries do not have good finances to support all of them with the newest technology of medical treatments.
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, even though the government can support the latest medical treatments, people did not give attention to their
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.
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, people who smoke do not want to stop smoking until they found cancer, lung cancer is the result of smoking a lot and for a long time.
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, the income of citizens is very low which shows how they have no life quality. The government should educate them and they should take care and take a serious of their
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. In conclusion, I agree that free
health
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 service is the most important in every
country
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, but I do not agree that the latest medical treatments should be included.
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