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Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of social networking.

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In today’s fast-paced world, the issue of using social networking has stirred up a number of heated debates among
people
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 of different opinions as some
people
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 come up with the idea that it brings several benefits to
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society,
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, the remaining do not accept the idea. So
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, the advantages and disadvantages of
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 issue will be discussed in the following paragraphs in turn.
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 of all, social networking is making
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people
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 lives more convenient and easier these days.
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 of social networking, the world becomes a village and we can contact
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everyone, everywhere.
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 of its algorithm, we can reconnect
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 long-lost friends.
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, we can learn the
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vest
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 majority of new things
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 of
internet
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 and social networking.
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, it is a very helpful fact for
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 in
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. Most importantly, social networking really helps
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people
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 lives during
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 pandemic, COVID-19. Not by the
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 of social networking, it will be hard for contacting each other for certain purposes,
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 as grocery buying, working, study
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 or etc.
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, on the downside, some
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 who are addicted to using social networking are not able to concentrate
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 their self-company. Using social networking can take a huge amount of time without noticing it. Using social media is addictive and as a consequence, it will keep high screen time,
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it
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 can lead to
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damage to brain cells, neurone system and sleep disorder.
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, it can
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 spill the employees in the workplace that they might not be able to accomplish their daily tasks. Social networking can
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 be seen as a major entertainment not only for teenagers
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 but
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 for older
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, as
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social networking can reduce
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personal interaction, we can lack
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emotional connection and interaction with friends. The
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 thing is about security and
scamming
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. It is not important if the user is
skillful
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, but for
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older
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 and other uneducated
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, it will have the concern of scammers. All things of both advantages and disadvantages, it is simply considered as we are now living in a fascinating constantly changing world, social networking is important. Because we have to make the best of every opportunity, and adapt and keep up with changing events. But we need to be careful not to
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over use
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 social networking.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bilingual
  • multilingual
  • fluency
  • communicate
  • cognitive skills
  • cultural awareness
  • opportunities
  • globalized world
  • job market
  • interact
  • linguistic abilities
  • cultural exchange
  • language proficiency
  • language barrier
  • foreign travel
  • personal growth
  • academic achievement
  • self-confidence
  • enhance
  • cross-cultural communication
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