"Mothers play key roles in the upbringings of children. But in the recent times both parents are getting busy with professional life. Who, in your opinion, should take the responsibility of childcare now?"
Five decades ago it was normal that the
men
worked 5 days a week and that the women
stayed home and took care of the kids. However
, nowadays parents
are both
busy with their jobs. In this
essay, I will discuss who should take the
responsibility Correct article usage
apply
of
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for
the
childcare and why.
No one would dispute the fact that mothers play an important role in the raising of children. These days Correct article usage
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women
got way more opportunities. For example
, a recent survey suggested that 80% of the
young Correct article usage
apply
women
went to college and have a fulltime
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full-time
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part-time
partime
job, in comparison with 50 years ago Correct your spelling
parttime
part time
this
number was only 40%. In my point of view, it is a good thing that also
women
can pursue their careers instead
of only men
.
It was always an image that the men
should bring in all the money, but this
image is slowly disappearing. A very good example is an interview that was done among young men
, it showed that men
also
want to care for the child
and not work full-time. I think that this
is a good thing, due to the important
of interaction with the Replace the word
importance
child
at a young age. This
interaction helps a lot with the bond of the child
.
To conclude, I believe that there is not one parent who should take responsibility for childcare. But it is a good thing that the women
are working more and the men
are working less. The ideal situation is that both
parents
take care of the childcare so that both
parents
can have a good bond with the child
. For instance
, both
parents
have a 4 day
working week which results in each parent have got one day with the children.Add a hyphen
4-day
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite