In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

Although
there are developments in agriculture, many
people
around the world still suffer from the case
that is
not having enough food to eat. ​
First
of all, the main
problem
about
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this
case is that some
people
are over-eating and
purchase
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foods
although
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they
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are unnecessary for them. And
then
, the
foods
that they bought will be
the
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waste. To tackle
this
problem
, there should be constraints in purchasing
foods
such
as one sandwich for one person and ten eggs for one family. If it is restricted in the world, it will be justified for every
people
. When
people
are limited to
eat
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or
buy
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buying
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foods
, they will know the value of the foodstuff. In
this
way,
people
can be protected from going hungry. ​
Secondly
, there are not enough areas to farm in the world. The higher the population, the more mouths to eat.
Subsequently
, there are more buildings to live
so
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that
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the farms are replaced with
people
’s shelters. To draw
this
problem
, every
people
should have a small farm in their
houses
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. If they are hungry and not convenient to buy foodstuff, they can pluck some vegetables
such
as lettuce, cabbage and cauliflowers from the small farm.
Moreover
, these are not only organic but
also
fresh for them.
Consequently
, they can be healthy and prevented from going hungry. ​In conclusion, every
problem
has solutions to solve smoothly.
However
,
people
need to follow the steps that I mentioned above to avoid
from
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a
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case
that is
not having enough food to eat.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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