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You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months say how your work could be done while you are away ask for his/her help in arranging it

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Dear Manager, I hope you are doing well. I am writing to inform you that I would like to work for half a year in the head office in
London
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. Recently, I got news from one of my best friends who lives in
London
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 that he will get married next January in the same place where he is living now.
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, he would need my help
for
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 his shopping and preparing other functions over there. For that reason, I have to go to
London
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 for around six months. I completely understand that working from
London
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 makes it difficult for me to attend every meeting on time. But I will definitely complete each task and attend every meeting from our head office.
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, I could get a chance to work with our team based in
London
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.
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, I would really appreciate it if you could arrange a setup at our head office in
London
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. Please let me know if any
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 information is required. Thank you for your understanding and consideration. Yours sincerely, Dharm

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Say more about why work in the head office helps your job, not only your friend.
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Ask for help in a clear way, like a direct request at the end.
coherence and cohesion
Keep each body part on one main point.
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Use clear link words like also, so, and because.
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You answer all three parts of the task.
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Your letter has a clear start and end.
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Your ideas are easy to follow most of the time.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • professional advancement
  • cross-cultural collaboration
  • headquarters/ head office
  • global perspective
  • remote work
  • temporary assignment
  • team dynamics
  • networking opportunities
  • cultural immersion
  • succession planning
  • collaborative tools
  • time zone coordination
  • corporate hierarchy
  • relocation logistics
  • work-life balance
  • multinational environment
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