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The rise of convenience foods has helped people keep up with the speed of the modern life style. what are the advantages of this trend? do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Over the
last
 few years, The usage of Preprocessed items has increased especially among the urban population. They are used mainly because the time taken to prepare them is less and the shelf life is
also
 more. Others prefer not to use them because they are concerned about the chemicals which are used to preserve them. They in turn have harmful effects on the body. In the below section I will discuss the advantages and disadvantages of using canned meals.
To begin
 with, one of the advantages of using canned items is they have a long shelf life.
For example
, During the recent covid pandemic individuals who were at higher risk used Tin items. The advantage of
this
 was they travelled less frequent to the Supermarket, Which is considered a hotspot for the virus.
Furthermore
, The urban population which is super busy with their hectic schedule prefer using precooked meals because it takes less time to prepare.
However
, there are a few drawbacks to using canned food.
For example
, The most commonly used chemical in the processing is BPA. There have been studies which relate to BPA causing reduced brain development and obesity.
Furthermore
, If the
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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