One of the consequences of improved medical care os that the people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Some tours require proven previous experience before taking you
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a trip, despite the money purchased,
such
tours must provide an accomplished guide who is
first
aid skilled.
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, it might require special
outfit
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and equipment.
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, equipment for Kilimanjaro costs around 30000$ and includes special clothes, oxygen cylinders and many more. Those were the reasons why the price is huge, ignoring the fact that the physical state should be above-average.
On the other hand
, the benefits of
such
a challenge
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hardening
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of the spirit and gaining survival attainments. People definitely return from
such
trips with their minds changed
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the right direction.
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, I have a friend who used to work for a low wage, but
he
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prepared for the
one month
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mountain trip and after he returned he started a new business and left his bad habits. Another profit is
unique
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experience which has no meritable value. Some experts say that if you have burned out on your profession, the best way is to take a sabbatical and go
traveling
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, to clear your thoughts and mind. But for some, visiting unusual places is not enough, the difficult conditions and survival conditions work as a stimulus and inspiration. In conclusion, in order to talk about extreme
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, required sport shape, previous
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experience, high cost of equipment and tour guide limits the number of capable participants despite the benefits useful to humans in general.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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