The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.
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The two maps illustrate some changes in the way people accessed a city hospital in two different years, 2007 and 2010.
It is clear that
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the main differences in
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access to
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hospital involve intersection upgrades and the development of parking spaces and bus facilities. From 2007 to 2010, the most striking change is the appearance of two new roundabouts. The first one was constructed at the three-way junction of the hospital
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and the ring
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surrounding the hospital,
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the
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one was located at the four-way intersection of the hospital
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and the city
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. Looking at the other features, we can see that the six bus stops, situated along the hospital
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, were removed to make way for a new bus station
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the western side of
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road
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. In terms of parking spaces, a new public car park was constructed
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the eastern side of the hospital and people could access
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car park via the ring
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,
while
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the old parking lot became a staff-only area.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words road with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • dual carriageway
  • roundabout
  • traffic flow
  • multi-story car park
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian provisions
  • footpaths
  • traffic signals
  • construction phase
  • ambulances
  • carriageway expansion
  • traffic congestion
  • pedestrian crossings
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure development
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