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Students should pay full cost for their own study, because university education benefits individuals rather than society . To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Currently, students of the university are concerned about the high costs and considerate to continue their learning.
Therefore
, some people proposed the idea of total scholarship because it will bring more benefits to society. I completely agree with that opinion and
this
 essay will evidence it. First of all, enlistment is the foundation of national culture. The reason why I assumed that education is founded to develop admission. If it appears an object between enlistment and culture
such
 as a learning expense, that foundation will collapse.
For example
, imagine that the school has no recruitment going to study because they cannot afford their cost, that would be a terrible imagination.
Therefore
, the scholarship is proposed to solve
this
 problem, not only partly scholarship but
also
 totally ones help students having a bad situation.
Besides
 that, other opinions say that university schooling should bring advantages for society rather than individuals. It can be easy to understand, but remember that when admission finishes their learning, they can bring more and more benefits to the community and their country.
For instance
, a student who graduated from university majoring in law can bring 10% more value for taxes than normal people. In conclusion, because of the values students bring to the general public, they should pay the full cost of their own studies.
Therefore
, it should have been demonstrated that the top universities always encouraged their learners with scholarships every year.
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Coherence and Cohesion
Enhance clarity and precision in your argument. Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea and fully explore that concept before moving on.
Task Achievement
To bolster your argument, incorporate more detailed and specific examples. This will make your propositions more convincing.
Introduction/Conclusion
Your essay presents a cohesive argument with a clear introduction and conclusion, connecting the issue with broader societal values.
Supported Main Points
Your points about the importance of education in shaping national culture and the potential benefits graduated students bring to society are well-taken and contribute positively to your overall argument.

Word Count

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • beneficiary
  • accountability
  • economic mobility
  • social inequalities
  • subsidized education
  • vocational training
  • deliberate choice
  • earning potential
  • public funding
  • societal benefits
  • innovation
  • self-financing
  • social mobility
  • economic equality
  • grants
  • scholarships
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