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People say that a child’s success is dependent on the way parents bring them up. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Ostensibly,
parents
 play an indispensable part in the
success
 of their
children
 because they are often considered
as
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the
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 primary teacher for them. I agree with
this
 notion as
parents
 not only teach them how to deal with pressure but
also
 support the dreams of their offspring.
This
 essay will delve deeper into these points in the impending paragraphs.
To begin
 with, being the
first
 teacher,
parents
 teach their
children
 about the process of handling pressure which is a major factor to determine their
success
 in
life
. To cite an example, A survey conducted by The Guardian Newspaper in March 2015 revealed that 55% of people had been accepting the contribution of their
parents
' instructions in their
success
 because they enlightened them to face
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the ups and downs of their
life
 at an early age.
Hence
, if a child, with the guidance of his
parents
, is capable enough to treat victory and failure calmly,
such
 nature may lead him to a successful professional
life
.
Furthermore
, a parent's role is a catalyst for a better
life
 for their
children
 as they may always support their dreams.
For example
, World Child Care, a department of the UK, mentioned in its annual report in May 2016 that 65% of
children
 were able to score good grades in their studies since their
parents
 always stood by them by providing financial support. In fact, the replies of these
children
 in the report
also
 mentioned that no sooner did they perform
bad
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 in their studies than their
parents
 ensured a proper disciplined and
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life
 at home and certainly,
this
 approach made them able to perform well. To conclude, it is unequivocal that the efficacy of
children
 is directly proportional to the way their
parents
 raise them. I think if
children
 follow the teachings of their
parents
,
success
 will follow them in future.
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