The issue of gay marriage remains controversial. Some people think that this trend has adverse effects on the society while others believe that it is seen as a natural trend and right for people to choose this type of marriage. Should gay marriage be legal? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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many countries that policymakers should give freedom to couples who want to build a family with single-sex and protect from them by legal ,while others argue with
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statement and allege
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structure have adverse effects across the society, so , it has been seen that the prevalence of
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been creating due to pressure on having an official family and they cannot marry with their loved person because it is illegal,
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family and it is many benefits to humanity and
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form of marriage that the majority of people can imagine and it is not normal to have a single-sex family ,but, many
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sexual interest of one partner in a family.
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between couples ,so, it is well
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because it is possible these families have children that
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decreasing unwanted
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. Ar
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each nation and it is
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evaluating mental health,
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, love and relationship is a crucial role in flourished life ,so ,if anyone cannot be able to reach in own demands ,without doubt ,the balance of mental
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fitness
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lost many persons that can be
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watched a movie about a famous scientist that cannot marry with his loved person ,so he decided to do suicide . In conclusion,
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psychologists
psycologists
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must be a backbone for approving and protecting by legal from the people who want to have
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marriage, because it is
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society to have many citizens with different sexual
orientation
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and these acts may be reduced the grade of
divorce
and prepared the environment that has more freedom for everyone to be ownself.
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