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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some believe that accepting the bad situations, like a frustrated job or a lack of money, is the best way will lead to stress, depression,
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 anxiety and will not become successful in
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,
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, some argue that in
such
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 conditions, it is better to tackle and improve
such
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 situations. I believe that facing problems will boost self-confidence and courage, and you will be able to get a higher position in a job. On the one hand, a few
people
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 argue that accepting the bad
phase
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 is the best way, which will only lead the individual to stress, depression, and anxiety.
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, these bad feelings will end up in anyone's
life
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.
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, it will not improve any essential skills,
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 as
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 varied career-making skills.
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, in India,
people
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 are currently facing unemployment, and it is increasing day by day.
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, some
people
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 feel that in bad situations,
people
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 have to try more to improve
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 conditions because
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 will directly boost self-confidence,
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 the courage to achieve something in
life
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, gaining these good qualities leads to getting a higher-level dream job in a well-known firm.
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, one of my friends has faced
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 a bad
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 in his
life
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, and he has overcome
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phase
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, he is the CEO of a company. In conclusion, I firmly believe that try to improve and do something in the bad conditions which will lead the success.
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, remaining quiet in a bad
phase
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 can hamper
life
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Make sure to give a strong clear opinion in your introduction and conclusion.
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Add more specific examples to support your points, especially in the first part of your essay.
coherence and cohesion
Use more linking words (like 'however', 'moreover') to connect your ideas better.
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You present both sides of the argument well, which shows good understanding of the topic.
coherence and cohesion
Your conclusion summarizes your opinion clearly, which is good for closing the essay.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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