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People these days watch TV, films and other programs alone rather than with other people. Do this advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Essay 1 There are different sources available to gather
information
such
 as
newspapers
, television and other online resources.
However
,It is often thought that
newspapers
 are the best medium to get
news
, while others trust
in
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some
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other alternatives. I firmly believe that
newspapers
 got
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out dated
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 compared to other modern mediums like television, and other online mediums. Tremendous changes happen in the way we communicate and gather
information
. Earlier it was done only by printed media and it is a widely accepted source of
information
 globally and nationally as well .
News
 from different streams is given in daily
newspapers
,
for example
,
news
 and updates about
sport
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,
economic
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, health and developments.
Besides
, there are authentic sources of
information
for instance
 data given in
newspapers
 are referential. In spite of, its wide range of acceptance, it got outdated by some other modern technologies. Modern ways to get informed are more accepted because of
its
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 speed and convenience. In place of
long awaited
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day
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days
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 for
further
 updates online
news
 portals, Television
news
 portals and other online resources became
fastest
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the fastest
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 broadcasters with live updates.
Secondly
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 the money we spent
for
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newspapers
 is reduced by modern facilities.
Moreover
, through
networking
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 we get access to different sources of
information
 at a time with less effort and expense in comparison with printed media within a fraction of a
second
.
Finally
, despite the monotonous reading,
news
 channels provide
information
 with the support of audiovisual data. To conclude,
newspapers
 put a legacy in the path of gathering
information
though
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serves
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 better.
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