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Many people today think that homework is still an important part of school while others think that it is becoming outdated. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

There is no denying the fact that the role of
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students is arguable. It is widely believed that
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essential in
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, others consider
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an
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 idea. In my opinion, I support the side that encourages
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 an effective way to enhance children's skills,
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this
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 is because pupils recently did not
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 at all because of using smart devices in their learning process.
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, a well-known school in America have forced its students to write a
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 daily in order to let them use their hands in writing.
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,
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 the information
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. A growing body of research suggests that writing anything helps in
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 it three times faster.
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, despite the benefits of assignments, a plethora of parents believe that it is an outdated idea since teachers in
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 are doing their job very well.
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, presently, there are a lot of exams that assess the teaching process throughout the level of the students
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, teachers have to do all of
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effort in order to get a higher ranking score.
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, the EmSat exam is one of these exams that
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. In conclusion,
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 are trying their best to enhance the level of their pupils, which erases the need for any
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 tasks, still the benefits of
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 outweigh their absence in my opinion.

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task achievement
Try to provide clearer examples and explanations for your points.
coherence and cohesion
Use more connecting words to make your ideas flow better.
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Make sure to proofread your writing for grammar and spelling mistakes.
task achievement
You presented both views on the topic clearly.
coherence and cohesion
Your conclusion summarizes your opinion well.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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