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Computers are being used more and more in education. Discuss the advantages and disadvantags.

#computers #education #disadvantags
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There has been a controversy about whether
computers
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 are influential in education. I think there are advantages and disadvantages. My reasons will be explained in the following paragraphs.
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,
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 can practice
students
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' independent learning skills.
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,
personnel
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 can record or pick some clips,
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 as the preview of the lesson or some extra information, and upload them to the platform.
Therefore
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,
students
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 can survey by themselves. Everyone has his own pace; some people tend to learn faster, while others prefer to study slower. At
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 point,
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 are overly helpful because learners can watch clips based on their own speed, and learners can even watch some videos again if they have questions.
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,
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 bring convenience. Because of
computers
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, learners can survey whenever and wherever they want, and they won't be affected by the limitation of time and location. In traditional teaching, if a student is absent from a lesson, it's impossible to let teachers repeat the lesson for him. In
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 case,
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 teaching can redress
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 issue; because there are videos, the student can still catch up by watching those materials.
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,
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 teaching seems more intriguing than traditional teaching; the content can be more impressive on
computers
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.
Third
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,
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 teaching can facilitate the interaction between teachers and
students
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. Due to some
students
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' characteristics, they are scared to speak in class;
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, they become willing to communicate with
personnel
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 through online teaching. It's worth mentioning that
personnel
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 can understand each student's personality and learning process; these things are impossible in traditional education due to the limited teaching hours.
On the other hand
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, the
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 has some demerits.
For example
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,
personnel
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 needs to spend extra time dealing with study materials. In traditional teaching, a teacher only needs some notes and teacher books.
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, in
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 teaching,
personnel
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 must be familiar with all the software.
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, how to pick the appropriate materials is
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 a thorny problem. In conclusion,
computer
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 teaching has merits and demerits, but I would still say its advantages outweigh its disadvantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-learning
  • digital literacy
  • online collaboration
  • multimedia resources
  • virtual classrooms
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  • pedagogy
  • remote learning
  • adaptive technology
  • educational inequality
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