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Computers are being used more and more in education. Discuss the advantages and disadvantags.

#computers #education #disadvantags
There has been a controversy about whether
computers
 are influential in education. I think there are advantages and disadvantages. My reasons will be explained in the following paragraphs.
First
,
computers
 can practice
students
' independent learning skills.
For example
,
personnel
 can record or pick some clips,
such
 as the preview of the lesson or some extra information, and upload them to the platform.
Therefore
,
students
 can survey by themselves. Everyone has his own pace; some people tend to learn faster, while others prefer to study slower. At
this
 point,
computers
 are overly helpful because learners can watch clips based on their own speed, and learners can even watch some videos again if they have questions.
Second
,
computers
 bring convenience. Because of
computers
, learners can survey whenever and wherever they want, and they won't be affected by the limitation of time and location. In traditional teaching, if a student is absent from a lesson, it's impossible to let teachers repeat the lesson for him. In
this
 case,
computer
 teaching can redress
this
 issue; because there are videos, the student can still catch up by watching those materials.
Besides
,
computer
 teaching seems more intriguing than traditional teaching; the content can be more impressive on
computers
.
Third
,
computer
 teaching can facilitate the interaction between teachers and
students
. Due to some
students
' characteristics, they are scared to speak in class;
on the contrary
, they become willing to communicate with
personnel
 through online teaching. It's worth mentioning that
personnel
 can understand each student's personality and learning process; these things are impossible in traditional education due to the limited teaching hours.
On the other hand
, the
computer
 has some demerits.
For example
,
personnel
 needs to spend extra time dealing with study materials. In traditional teaching, a teacher only needs some notes and teacher books.
However
, in
computer
 teaching,
personnel
 must be familiar with all the software.
In addition
, how to pick the appropriate materials is
also
 a thorny problem. In conclusion,
computer
 teaching has merits and demerits, but I would still say its advantages outweigh its disadvantages.
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  • e-learning
  • digital literacy
  • online collaboration
  • multimedia resources
  • virtual classrooms
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