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Living In A Country Where You Have To Speak A Foreign Language Can Cause Serious Social And Practical Problems

#country #language
These days, communication is one of the most crucial factors in part of
people
’s life. When we have to stay in
other country
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another country
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 where
you
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we
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 can’t use
your
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our
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language
, it is an easy way to let somebody understand what you do want or what you do you mean,
such
 as speaking or body
language
. In my opinion, I strongly disagree with
this
 statement, I will give reliable reasons and relative examples in
this
 essay. Human is always adaptive when we are living in
new
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 environment where
people
 don’t speak
in
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apply
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the same
language
with
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as
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 us. We will use every part of our bodies to help
communication
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 with other
people
 during working or shopping. If we need to buy some fruits
about
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of about
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 3 kilograms in
supermarket
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the supermarket
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 but we don’t how to say, we will show the seller three fingers which
is
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 how
use
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to use
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body
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the body
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 to communicate. I had
experience
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an experience
the experience
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 once two years
age
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ago
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 that,
for example
, living in Austria,
people
 speak German
which
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while
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 I can’t speak
that
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the
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language
. So, in the beginning,
the
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body
language
 is always used when I have to communicate with other
people
. The
distinguish
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 between
human
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humans
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 and animals is
human
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humans
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is
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never stop learning. It is exciting to try to speak a
language
 that they never dream to do when they accidentally have
long-term
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a long-term
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 staying in another country. In Austria,
for instance
, I felt that I want to speak German and the
first
 easy two words that I have learnt are how to say hello and thank you. It is common
using
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 in daily life, I guess. The
language
 class is wanted because I very enjoy studying their
language
. In conclusion, human is always adaptive and never stop learning,
thus
, it
is
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absolutely
not
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does not
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 cause any serious problems in society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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