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Government should spend money on railways rahter than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

#government #money #railways #rahter #roads
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we all know that time is so crucial in today's era. You can be a millionaire but time is something which
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 be purchased. There are many modes of transport available like airways , roadways, railways and waterways and individuals choose them according to their suitability. Undoubtedly, by air , we can reach our destination earlier as compared to the other means but it's unaffordable for some
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 ones. And means of water
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 not available in every part of the nation.Ultimately, road and railways are the ones who are left and according to me ,
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 should spend more money on the latter one. Everything
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 some advantages and disadvantages, but coming
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provides a variety of opportunities in terms of jobs and even it is more economic .In countries like India ,
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 rate is so poor and if
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 network will get increased, so definitely it will lead to the better one.For the transportation of goods, the connection will be more feasible Education is the asset which can change the world and in today's arena , each and everything requires money , so in order to take
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one step towards the
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development
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 of the world ,
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 network should get increased and ultimately it will raise the employment rate and so the education.
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