Task 2: Some people think secondary school students should learn international news as one of their subjects, while others believe that this is a waste of valuable time. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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There is no shortage of opinions on whether in school children should learn about international

news

as one of their subjects or not. But if I were forced to choose, I definitely would be against

this

class.

However

, there are some pros and cons, and I will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.

First

of all, the main point against an update with a new class of international

news

is its uselessness. Young people can be really affected by stressful information that usually comes from media, and

that is

definitely not something their parents want from education. I believe

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to add classes that will enhance logical thinking or will focus on self-improvement.

For instance

, it could be chess lessons. As I remember, India made chess classes mandatory and required each student to take them every week.

As a result

, kids constantly improve their wittiness and smartness, and

therefore

later will have the ability to make better decisions. So it is certainly clear to see why I think that watching the

news

can be a real waste of time.

In contrast

to the previous reason,

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some occasions having some basic knowledge about international political and economical situations can be important.

Moreover

, if the lessons are structured correctly, children will receive information from which they can learn and increase their level of awareness.

For example

, after the horrible situation with the war in Ukraine started to escalate, some people in Europe decided to help refugees and don't leave the problem aside. But unfortunately, others still don't understand all the consequences of

this

war, and they might have another opinion if they have heard some international

news

earlier. For

this

reason, I believe that having a well-rounded education with some specific unusual classes can be

also

helpful. To sum up, in the light of the above-mentioned reasons, I want to emphasize that despite having a class on international

news

can take children's time from more crucial things, everyone should be aware of specific things

such

as geopolitics.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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12Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

337 words

7.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Task 2: Some people think secondary school students should learn international news as one of their subjects, while others believe that this is a waste of valuable time. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

You want to sell your laptop. You think a friend of yours might like to to buy it from you. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: Explain why you are selling the laptop Discribe the laptop Suggest a date when your friend can come and see it

Fewer and fewer people today write by hand using a pen, pencil, or brush. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or negative development?

The media pay too much attention to the lives and relationships of celebrities such as actors, singers or footballer. They should spend more time reporting the lives of ordinary people instead.