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Today it is a common practice for many business meeting and business training to take place online. Do advantages out-weight the disadvantages.

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In recent years technology has increased rapidly in several formats .
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 in today's
world
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 there are
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 of benefits to
use
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advance
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 technology mainly for business and virtual meetings. In my
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although
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this
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 trend has numerous benefits, the advantage preponderate over the demerits On the one hand,
advancement
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internet
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the internet
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are
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plethora
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 of benefits.
First
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 and foremost, easy communication without physical presence any person can attend from another country without any
interpition
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 due to web presence and
high interest
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 signal
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for
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 instance,
video
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a video
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 conference can
be happened
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similarly
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 like live interaction.
Secondly
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organization
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organizations
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 are providing training to their employees online because, flexible to understand with content video and separate doubts section to illustrate, during pandemic many businesses essential training are structured online
On the other hand
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internet
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the internet
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 become
a
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 important part of our life main concern about personal data of companies may reveal online due to
cyber crime
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cybercrime
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 because recently over 64% of
crime
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crimes
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 happened
on
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online by hacking important websites of
business
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the business
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.
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, internet access might get
rely
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 in various locations which directly affects the
company
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 loss. So depending on
network
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the network
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 can become
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to
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 income In conclusion, there are several merits over drawbacks as good interaction without any lagging clear video conference but, dangerous about
security
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the security
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 of companies mainly hacking
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Telecommuting
  • Virtual collaboration
  • Webinar
  • Connectivity issues
  • Interactive platforms
  • Digital divide
  • Synchronous/Asynchronous
  • Eco-friendly
  • Cost-efficient
  • Participant engagement
  • Networking opportunities
  • Skillset enhancement
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