As a result of deforestation and illegal hunting, many animal species are becoming endangered and some are even facing extinction. Do you think it is important to protect animals? What can be done to deal with this problem?

As humans have been moving towards development over
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few centuries, it has been inversely impacting the wildlife around us.
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requirement for
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development
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development
has been more land to create infrastructure which is leading to more deforestation and ultimately resulting in endangering or
extinction
of some animal
species
. Illegal hunting has
also
added fuel to
this
grave concern. In
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essay, I will outline the importance of protecting
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wildlife and explain some
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to tackle
this
problem.
Animals
play an important role in
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maintaining
maintainting
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maintaining
the ecological balance of our nature. Indeed, every
species
plays a crucial role in the food chain established by the nature. Tigers,
for instance
, were on the verge of
extinction
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back due to illegal hunting and their habitat being destroyed while expanding our cities. If they would have become extinct, it would have created
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significant
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gap in our food chain. Without a doubt,
animals
and
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have to coexist in the world and
extinction
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of either can have
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negative
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in years to come.
Nonetheless
, we still have time to correct our actions and treat
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an animal
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animal
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with equal importance as ourselves. Two ways can
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us to handle the issue at hand,
however
, both
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intervention
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of the
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government
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government
. One is to again recreate the natural
habibat
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habitat
for the
animals
by developing various national parks throughout the country,
moreover
, they should be protected from illegal hunters,
for instance
, Jim Corbett National Park.
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to
this
,
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should bring new laws to have strict punishment against those who are involved in illegal hunting.
This
will create fear in the mind of
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offenders and help
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the endangered
species
. In conclusion, there is no denial
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the fact that many animal
species
have become endangered due to
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motives of humans.
Although
we have made enough damage to various
species
, there is still time to acknowledge the importance of
animals
and take necessary
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measure
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measures
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to prevent the endangered
species
from
extinction
.
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