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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children). Do you agree or disagree?

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In
this
 contemporary day and age, many young people are interested in
community
services
 and many schools are encouraging students to be a part of them. In my opinion, I totally agree with the notion that
community
services
 should be a compulsory part of
the
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high school programmes. I will expound on my viewpoint in the following paragraphs.
Firstly
, working as
volunteer
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a volunteer
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 (working for NGO) will improve his/her skills in the working environment and help to meet a lot of different people, which will improve communication skills and
also
 help in their CV.
For instance
, to get a job after college in a well-renowned company the basic requirement after a degree they see is a good communication
skill
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 and any experience in any kind of work.
Moreover
, teenagers do not get involved in extracurricular activities after school because either they are going to watch TV or play video games,these
community
services
 will keep them busy.
Secondly
, they will
also
 learn the importance of earning money even if they are not getting paid and
also
 know how hard is to make income and how to spend them wisely.
For example
, if the pupil goes to
community
 service he/she will know the essence of hard-earned.
Furthermore
, it will
also
 keep them to stay away from getting any bad habits and into
any
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trouble.
However
, they should not only focus on these
services
they
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but they
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 should
also
 focus on their studies. In conclusion, it is salient for students to get involved in any type of
community
 service because it will be going to help in the future in certain ways and going to give them benefits.
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