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Some experts say for road safety cyclists should pass a test before being allowed on public roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

#experts #road #safety #cyclists #test #roads
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Nowadays,
people
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variety
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 of transportations
such
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 as automobiles, trains, motorcycles,
bicycles
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 etc
..
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 Some of these are required
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a drivers
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drivers
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driver's
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 license to use it on
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public roads, but some others are not. Specialists say
cyclists
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 should have
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drivers
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a drivers
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 exam before they ride
bicycles
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 on
the
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public roads for
road
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 safety. In my opinion, I
am totally agree
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 with the specialist’s statement and all
cyclists
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 must take
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drivers
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driver's
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 examination.
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 with,
people
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 do not know the
road
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 rules so
driving
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a driving
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test
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 would help them to understand riding
the
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bicycles
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 properly.
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, I have seen many
people
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rode
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riding
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the
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bicycles
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 on the
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sidewalk
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side walk
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sidewalk
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. In Japan,
bicycles
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 are not allowed to ride on the
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sidewalk
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side walk
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sidewalk
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. The exceptions are for
people
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 who are below thirteen or over seventy years old
drivers
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, and
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side way
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sideway
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 with the sign which allows
cyclists
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 on the
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side walk
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sidewalk
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 and other reasons that
cyclists
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 cannot ride on the
road
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.
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,
people
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are still ride
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bicycles
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 on
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sidewalks
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side walks
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sidewalks
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 and I
usually
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am usually
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 afraid of the
bicycles
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 passing right
next
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 to me when I am walking. Even
the
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 government announced the rules
people
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 do not care about that because they do not have
chance
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a chance
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 to reach that information.
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,
driving
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a driving
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test
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 would be a good way to spread the rules to the
people
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 who ride
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bicycles
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. Some ages are not appropriate to ride
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bicycles
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, so
driving
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the driving
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test
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 will be the filter to judge
people
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 who
has
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appropriate
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the appropriate
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 skills to ride
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bicycles
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 on the public
road
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 or not. I have seen many old
people
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 ride
bicycles
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 on the street even
they
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if they
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 don’t control the bicycle properly.
Some times
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 they ride the
bicycles
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 so slow and shaking handles. I have seen these
people
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 almost hitting
people
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 or some objects on the
road
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. Old
people
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 will lose their control naturally. As there are many car accidents reported on the news caused by old
people
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, Japanese governments try to be more strict on driving
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test
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 for
elderly
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the elderly
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.
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, installing driving
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test
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to
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for
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cyclists
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 will be a good approach to
stop
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stopping
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non skilled
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non-skilled
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drivers
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 to ride
bicycles
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 on
the
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public
road
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. In conclusion, I absolutely agree with experts who
wants
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 to install driving
test
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 for
cyclists
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 because
people
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 will know how to ride
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bicycles
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 properly and stop
non skilled
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non-skilled
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cyclists
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 ride
bicycles
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