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Many people think that the most important things in life are free (i.e. they cannot be bought). Do you agree or disagree?

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There are a variety of things that are important in
life
. Some people think the most important ones are free while
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on the other hand
 others argue that
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 they are not. I completely opine that the most important ones are free. In
this
 essay,I will state some evidence for the same. To embark, to advance a convincing theory, I could deal with the most serious affair we have, which is time. It was written in a famous poem, that time can’t be bought. Live the moment. When I was a child, I didn’t understand the meaning, yet when I grow older it makes sense to me. Every
second
 of
life
 is free but you can’t buy more seconds. It is crystal clear that
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 the things that you do during your
life
 lead to a different future. So, it is very important how you utilize your moments.
For instance
, count to 5. You now lose 5 seconds of your
life
. I read a book
last
 week. It was said, time is free but it can bring gold. In the forthcoming; paragraph I could deal with another feature which is, health. Thank god almost 70% of people have
a good health conditions
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 and the rest have special abilities which cover their disability. We must have a good and healthy lifestyle to protect our bodies mentally and physically. We all have had it since we were born. It’s been given to us freely. Whit
this
 feature, we can work and make money, hang out with our friends, travel around the world, drive a car and etcetera. To conclude, all in all,
Although
 they are free, they both play an important role.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Non-materialistic
  • Material wealth
  • Intrinsic value
  • Subjective well-being
  • Monetary assets
  • Fulfilling life
  • Emotional bonds
  • Financial security
  • Life satisfaction
  • Economic status
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