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art should be unrestricted. DO you agree or disagree

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Censoring art on several grounds, the opponents have been concerned about its future outlook.
However
, the advocators including me, have their own radices. The main aim of the following essay is to set out some justifications for
this
 issue. Perhaps, the most annoying drawback of not being censored about artworks is children. You know, there is a wide range of movies, theatres, photos and even paintings which are not suitable for some ages.
In particular
, the ones that have violent, terrifying and sexual terms are considered to have numerous negative footprints on specific individuals. Indeed, not only the adverse effects of them would vanish soon but
also
 in many cases they would not diminish simply.
Therefore
, to me, age limitation should be obliged.
Furthermore
, another negative impression in relation to some artificials is that neither they are beneficial nor worthwhile for society. To explain more, I should mention that some arts of senseless content would squander people's time, money and energy. So, being meaningless, these kinds of stuff could not really promote folks' knowledge as well as the level and unfortunately, the public art taste would be destroyed.
Therefore
, these kinds of stuff should remain disregarded and banned as a consequence of not being helpful and
also
 advantageous. Though, executives are better to expand their interest in high-value creativities. To recap the main points from what was mentioned above, I would agree that ,unlike several outstanding arts which are mood boosters and could touch our souls, the harsh and harmful ones should abolish for some ages or even the whole citizens.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Artistic expression
  • Freedom of expression
  • Stifle innovation
  • Challenge social norms
  • Provoke discussions
  • Perspectives and interpretations
  • Censorship
  • Suppression of voices
  • Accurate representation
  • Unrestricted
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