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Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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People have different views about whether university
students
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 focus on their main fields or learn more
skills
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as well as
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 their main major.
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 I believe that focusing on
one
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 thing can be beneficial, I agree that
students
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 need to gain other
skills
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 which are useful for their future lives and jobs. On the
one
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 hand, concentration on a main subject has some
benefits
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.
One
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 of the main
benefits
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 is that
students
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 can allocate more time and energy to mastering their specialization.
Besides
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, specialized individuals are essential in certain career paths
such
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 as medicine, law, and engineering. Another advantage is that the rate of stress among
students
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 can be reduced by reading just
one
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 subject as juggling multiple subjects can be stressful and overwhelming. Despite these
benefits
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, I think focusing exclusively on a field might curtail individuals' potential
skills
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 as social
skills
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.
On the other hand
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, I believe that university student should broaden their knowledge by learning diverse
skills
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. studying a
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wide
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 variety of
skills
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 can help
students
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 gain a broader understanding of the world, develop critical thinking, problem-solving, and communication
skills
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, and become well-rounded people which
benefits
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 people in their professional and personal lives.
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, many job positions require interdisciplinary knowledge. Learning additional subjects provides
students
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 with insights and
skills
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 that might be applicable in unexpected ways.
For example
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, in Astrobiology, astronomy, chemistry, and biology are integrated to explore life beyond Earth. Following passions and interests not only enhances their confidence but
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 gives them a sense of fulfilment to pursue their studies In conclusion, in my opinion, individuals should gain more knowledge as they can apply them in different aspects of their careers and lives.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Broaden
  • Perspectives
  • Specialize
  • Critical thinking
  • Problem-solving skills
  • Career success
  • Interdisciplinary connections
  • Structured path
  • Clear goals
  • Creativity
  • Innovation
  • Academic credibility
  • Recognition
  • Balance
  • Exploring
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