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In recent years a large number of highly skilled professionals like doctors, engineers and IT professionals from poorer countries are migrating to developed countries for better-paying jobs. What are the possible problems of this and what solutions can you suggest to deal with this issue?

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Nowadays, individuals with higher education like doctors, engineers and IT job holders move to regions like America, Canada, and Australia from under-developed nations to get decent job packages. In the forthcoming paragraphs, I will explain the difficulties these professionals are facing in their native land and I will
also
 shed light on the ways to stop
this
.
To begin
 with, people do hard work for a long period of time to get a valuable degree but
as a result
, they do not receive the appropriate package they deserve.
Moreover
, they hardly run their house expenses with low paychecks which degrades their living standard and
also
 affects them mentally.
In addition
 to
this
, the education value is very low in poor countries like Bangladesh, Nigeria, India etcetera
therefore
, highly qualified individuals do not get the deserving growth opportunity in their working careers. I think there are some solutions which can help in resolving these issues.
First
 of all, there should be a better employment structure and high pay career opportunities which will motivate the individuals to work for their own countries.
Additionally
, the living and office environment needs to be safe because some people do not want to live in a nation where thefts, robberies, and
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crime
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 happened on the regular basis.
For example
, India has come a long way in improving citizens' lifestyles and even providing exceptional working benefits. In conclusion, to keep the talent in the homeland government should implement above mention solutions as soon as possible
otherwise
, poor nations have to face great losses.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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