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You recently did a short cookery course. The cookery school has asked for your feedback on this course. Write a letter to the course director at the cookery school. In your letter - describe what you enjoyed about the course - say how much cooking you've done since the course - suggest another cookery course you'd like the school to offer

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to offer some valuable feedback on the cookery
course
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 that I did
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 month
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 your renowned school. I would like to start by
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thanking
thank
 you and your team for tutoring students with so much patience. Because the
course
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 was so thorough, I never faced any difficulty in comprehending the details. After learning to cook a wide variety of cuisines from
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 a well-known institute , I believe I will have an array of opportunities in the future. Since the completion of my
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, I have been cooking
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. I am glad to inform you that I got an internship at a cafe on
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Rogers Street. They were happy to offer me a stipend as well because of the generous feedback I got from one of your master chefs.
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 the
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 was undoubtedly perfect, it mostly focussed on teaching the preparation of main-
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 meals. It would be great if you could add
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complimentary
starters
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 and
sweet
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dish making
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course
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 to the original one. I hope my insights will be valuable. Yours faithfully, Tim Hortons
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