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The government should control the amount of violence in films and on television in order to decrease the violent crimes in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is often argued that the
government
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 should take proper measures to restrict the amount of violence and hate in
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 so that it would help in lowering the crime rates in
society
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.I completely agree that
movies
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 which contain brutal and cruel
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 it prints a negative impact on
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.
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 of all,I believe that violent
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 are going to create a negative impact primarily on children.Because the grasping and memorising power in children is somewhat high when compared to adults.
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, at A young ,age people tend to imitate that violent characterisation, Which leads to societal disturbance.On top of that,The teenagers do not have awareness about the law,If they habituated to toxic or abusive activities by watching films.It may restrict their mental growth and may cause psychological and mental trauma.
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,Recently,I read an article in
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An individual turned himself into a thief by watching
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.Now his life turned miserable and distressed. In my point of view,
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 or some concerned authorities should focus on how to drag
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 types of violent
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 or portrayals from cinemas.
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,I think that The harmful
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 are more addictive than good
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.People who are more vulnerable and delusional may get influenced easily.Violent
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 that may contain
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 guns,weapons, and dangerous weapons should be completely eradicated from
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.Because if an individual is exasperated they may lose their temper and try to attack others.
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,
Government
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 should keep censoring authorities to filter the
movies
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 which are only for adults.Every citizen should abide by the rules because we are living under the constitution. In conclusion, the main root cause of the increase in hate and violent crimes in
society
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 is because of violent films the
government
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 must concentrate on and come up with a flawless plan on how to plunge the crime rate in
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 by eliminating violent
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 from
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 complete eradication is not possible, some may
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 help.Because it can create a peaceful and pleasant
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