In some countries university students live at home with their family while they study, whereas in other countries students attend university in another city. Do you think the benefits of living away from home during university outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from own knowledge or experience.

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In many countries the students in the college prefer to stay with the family,

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in other countries they choose take

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in another city even abroad. These cases have several advantages in

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essay i will explain about my point of view. The students stay with their family lead them to not thinking about cost for rent the house or buy the food because their

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still have responsibility about

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On the other hand

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, the

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can control them when they are near from

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they are stay alone not needed to permision from the

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to go hangout,

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can control if around them specially in urban area.

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, stay alone and

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far away from the family it can make someone more independent because they learn new things

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as: management time, how to handle the money, cooking, and adapted with new people. when someone stay in new places they have to learn about cultures, dishes, languange , and the carachter of people.

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: students from Papua move to Jakarta which is different altmospher and they should not

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about the lesson but

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about everything near the areas when thy are stay. In Conclution, stay with family have benefit about the living cost and the

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can control the kids. Meanwhile,

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in another city far away from the

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has positive impact for te kids since they are more independent and know have knowledge about many things

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Try to elaborate more on why living with family or independently during university is beneficial or not. Add more specific examples to support your main points.

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Ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence, and use more cohesive devices or linking words.

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Your essay presents an interesting perspective on both living with family and independently during university studies, touching on cost and independence.

coherence cohesion

You have a structured essay with an introduction and conclusion.

coherence cohesion

You use examples, like the Papua and Jakarta reference, to illustrate your points.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

251 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

independence
self-reliance
finance management
exposure
broaden horizons
open-minded
adaptability
conducive environment
isolation
homesickness
financial burden
household duties
academic responsibilities
personal growth

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