television is dangerous because it destroys family life and sense of community, instead of visiting people or talking with our family, we just watch TELEVISION. WHAT is YOUR OPINION?

the bar chart illustrates the
amount
of 4
types’
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digital
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of digital
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games
sold by
billion
dollars
from 2000 to 2006. It is obvious that handheld
games
are the most popular
games
between
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6-year
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a 6-year
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period, and online
games
saw sharp increasing
sales
over
this
period. In 2000, console
games
sold around 6
billion
dollars
which
was
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almost half of the
amount
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of handheld
games
in the same year. Over the following years, handheld
games
sales
figures rose by approximately 7
billion
dollars
, while console
games
saw
sales
fell
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to
the
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approximately half
amount
which was about 2.8
billion
dollars
. online
games
selling rose dramatically by about 8
billion
dollars
from 2001 to 2006,
also
the mobile phone
games
selling saw
sales
rise by the number around 5
billion
dollars
from 2002 to 2006.
However
mobile phone
games
and online
games
increased enormously over
this
6-years
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6-year
period, handheld
games
still were by far the most important type of digital
games
selling and provided the biggest
amount
of selling
in
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each year.
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