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Some people think that success is the best indicator for intelligence, while others think that intelligence can be measured in other ways. What is your opinion?

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There is an ongoing debate regarding accomplishment and intelligence.
However
, I believe that success does not indicate an individual's intellect. Anyways, triumph and acumen depend on each other. We shall discuss more
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it in
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 essay. We are living in a society where people think that all the successful people are brainy but in reality, many factors
such
 as luck, and nepotism plays a crucial role. Nowadays, victory is defined by the house we are living in, by the car we possess and by the social connections we have.
Nevertheless
, all these materialistic things can be bought with money which can be passed on from previous generations as hereditary.
For example
, we can take the example of movie stars who are the best in their career but, they neither possess a proper college degree nor have good grades in their education. In our day-to-day life
also
, we get to see people who are dumb yet, doing good financially and consider them as great.
However
, being clever can make you successful in life but not vice versa.
For instance
, if a person is intellectual, he can work hard and can attain accomplishments but if an individual is successful , there is no proof that he is a good intelligent quotient. To conclude, both brilliance and prosperity go hand in hand but being successful alone does not define one's agility.
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