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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task Write about the following topic: Fast food is now universally in most countries and is becoming increasingly popular. Some feel that this is a positive trend, while others do not. What are your opinions in this?

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There has been a constant debate about whether the rising popularity of fast
food
 is a positive trend. In my opinion,
this
 is a negative trend. There are multiple reasons why the increasing consumption of fast
food
 is not a positive tendency.
Firstly
, fast
food
 is unhealthy and can put people’s health at risk.
According to
 several recent studies published in prestigious nutrition journals, fast
food
 is high in sugar, salt, saturated or trans fats,
as well as
 many preservatives and processed ingredients.
This
 increases the occurrence of diseases
such
 as type 2 diabetes and heart-related problems.
Secondly
, the consumption of fast
food
 can lead to financial problems for families.
While
 the target consumers of fast
food
 are middle- or low-income families, the price of fast
food
 has been increasing rapidly in recent years.
For instance
, the price of a two-piece chicken combo at Popeyes jumped from $6.49 to $11.39,
while
 an eight-inch club tuna from Jimmy John’s rose from $5.75 to $9.10,
according to
 FinanceBuzz. The rise in fast
food
 prices can cause a vast majority of fast
food
 brands to take advantage and raise their prices, leading to financial problems for many consumers and reducing the
overall
 quality of life. In conclusion, I believe that the widespread availability of fast
food
 is not a good trend. Even if it can provide an economic boost in some countries, it is not worth compromising the health and quality of life of people.
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task achievement
Your essay responds effectively to the task by addressing both sides of the argument and clearly stating your opinion. However, more elaboration on the opposing viewpoint could demonstrate a more balanced and comprehensive understanding of the topic.
coherence cohesion
To improve coherence, try linking the main points more fluidly to help the reader follow your argument more easily. For example, using cohesive devices such as 'Moreover,' 'Furthermore,' 'On the other hand,' etc. can enhance the flow of the essay.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are clear and effectively frame the essay. You have succinctly stated your opinion and summarized your main points.
task achievement
You provided relevant and specific examples, such as the price changes of fast food items, which support your argument well.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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