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People who live in the twenty first century have a better quality of life than people who live in previous centuries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 their
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 in today's world than in the past decade. In my
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 and enjoying plenty of
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 in
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. In my opinion, I agree that everyone owns a good
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 of
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, reducing illness as well as boosting health through medicine.
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 helps individuals avoid diseases and
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 makes them healthier. As medical
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 develops rapidly, it generates plenty of medicine,
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 as vitamins, to prove
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's bodies
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 healthy condition.
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, doctors are commonly seen in the cities or the countryside, when
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 feel ill they gain comments effortlessly.
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, when
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 are injured by accident, they can gain treatment quickly from the hospital.
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, a
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 of
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 cannot without medical
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, nowadays massive
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 give us good
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 in our daily
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. Numerous household
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,
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 as fridges and air conditioners, are convenient for us, which are that we can easily store food and we can avoid the hot summer day as well as the cold winter day.
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, in the past ages, they have no those
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 so they were very easy to die in extreme weather.
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, the
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 bring high
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 to our
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. To summarise, in the past ages,
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 are suffered from diseases and different
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, the
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 and the medical
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 bring a high
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 of
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 to us, we are actually living in the best world.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Quality of life
  • Technological advancements
  • Healthcare improvements
  • Life expectancy
  • Mortality rates
  • Standard of living
  • Economic growth
  • Job opportunities
  • Education access
  • Literacy rates
  • Human rights
  • Gender equality
  • Working conditions
  • Industrialization
  • Environmental issues
  • Modern conveniences
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