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People who live in the twenty first century have a better quality of life than people who live in previous centuries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In
this
 modern world,
people
 have a
high
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quality
 situation
on
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in
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 their
life
 in today's world than in the past decade. In my
technology
 and enjoying plenty of
applications
 in
life
. In my opinion, I agree that everyone owns a good
quality
 of
life
, reducing illness as well as boosting health through medicine.
To begin
 with, medical
technology
 helps individuals avoid diseases and
also
 makes them healthier. As medical
technology
 develops rapidly, it generates plenty of medicine,
such
 as vitamins, to prove
people
's bodies
on
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 healthy condition.
Moreover
, doctors are commonly seen in the cities or the countryside, when
people
 feel ill they gain comments effortlessly.
For instance
, when
people
 are injured by accident, they can gain treatment quickly from the hospital.
Therefore
, a
quality
 of
life
 cannot without medical
technology
.
Furthermore
, nowadays massive
applications
 give us good
quality
 in our daily
life
. Numerous household
applications
,
such
 as fridges and air conditioners, are convenient for us, which are that we can easily store food and we can avoid the hot summer day as well as the cold winter day.
For example
, in the past ages, they have no those
applications
 so they were very easy to die in extreme weather.
Thus
, the
applications
 bring high
quality
 to our
life
. To summarise, in the past ages,
people
 are suffered from diseases and different
temperature
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.
However
, the
applications
 and the medical
technology
 bring a high
quality
 of
life
 to us, we are actually living in the best world.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Quality of life
  • Technological advancements
  • Healthcare improvements
  • Life expectancy
  • Mortality rates
  • Standard of living
  • Economic growth
  • Job opportunities
  • Education access
  • Literacy rates
  • Human rights
  • Gender equality
  • Working conditions
  • Industrialization
  • Environmental issues
  • Modern conveniences
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