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Teenagers should not be allowed to use mobile phones in schools. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#teenagers #phones #schools
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signifcant
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significant
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the
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human being's life.
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, the advent of
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the mobile
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phone
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key
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 role in many people's day
today
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to day
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 activities. A fair amount of individuals suggest that the
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 of mobile
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phone
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phones
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 should be banned in school. I completely support
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 notion. On the one hand, gadgets have a
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dramatic
 effect on
children
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's attention
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 it has
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detrimental
 impacts on
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students
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 focus while studying. Nowadays ,a fair amount of
students
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 have been addicted to social media applications like Facebook and Instagram.
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, if they have an opportunity
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use
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mobile
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moble
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mobile
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 phones
on
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school
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the school
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 they will utilize
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.
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 ,concentration
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 studies will decline and have a negative effect on academic performance. Same like ,
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a mobile
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phone
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phones
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 can distract the child's interest
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education
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online
onlne
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 and offline games .
A research
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 conducted by WHO reported that excessive
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 of mobile has
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enomorous
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enormous
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children
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.
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, the excessive
use
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 of gadgets
have
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 a profound impact on
children
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's
decision making
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 skills. Recently ,
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internet
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the internet
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 has a vital role in student's life.
Consequently
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, a great
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number
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number
 of
children
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 always depend on
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the internet
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 for gaining knowledge.
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 a doubt , whenever a child
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 to acquire new information immediately
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that
they
thet
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they
 will search on the
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. So if
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teenagers have the chance to
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on
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 educational settings could encourage them to
use
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 more mobile
instead
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 of books and memories.
Likewise
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, they will not utilize the school facilities like
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the library
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 for learning . According to
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the Hindu
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newspaper
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news
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newspaper
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paper
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 7/10
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students
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of students
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 are always interested to acquire new ideas from
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internet
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 rather than books. To conclude ,
mobile
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the mobile
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phone
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advantagenous
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advantageous
in
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 some extent but it has a negative impact not only on
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students'
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 academics but
also
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creativity
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 of the child.
Therefore
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 , it should be prohibited in schools.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Focus
  • Academic performance
  • Distractions
  • Social media
  • Social interaction
  • Cheating
  • Mental health
  • Anxiety
  • Depression
  • Safety
  • Cyberbullying
  • Inappropriate content
  • Equal opportunities
  • Learning environment
  • Technology access
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