Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

It is considered that it is so good to release all types of
data
in scientific fields, business and the academic world.
In contrast
, others think some
data
is so important or sensitive, and it should not publish freely. Both views will be discussed in
this
essay. On the one hand, collecting
information
in each field needs a lot of resources and time, and all
companies
or universities which want
this
type of
information
should spend their time and resources.
Therefore
, sharing
information
provide a situation which prevents
companies
and universities from wast their time and resources.
For example
, if all universities publish their
information
about Machine Learning, all of them know the latest achievements in that field and work on new problems.
On the other hand
, each company has its approach, and it is different from other
companies
' approaches.
Consequently
, if it releases these types of
data
, other
companies
can copy that and
this
will hurt that company. Obviously, some
information
is crucial and important for
companies
or even countries.
Finally
, I think there are two types of
data
: sensitive and non-sensitive and if we publish non-sensitive
data
, those
data
will help others develop boundaries of science and build new
data
.
In contrast
, releasing sensitive
data
hurts
companies
and even countries. In conclusion, generally publishing
data
is good, and some people believe that but there is a type of
data
which is so valuable and released that has a bad impact on that organisation. Classified
data
is the best way to separate non-sensitive from sensitive.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • alternative medicines
  • treatments
  • positive development
  • negative development
  • health problems
  • usual doctor
  • access
  • personalized approach
  • holistic well-being
  • lack of regulation
  • evidence-based research
  • proper medical treatment
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