THESE DAYS, VIOLENCE AMONG YOUNG PEOPLE IS BECOMING INCREASINGLY WIDESPREAD/ DISCUSS THE CAUSE AND SOLUTION TO OVERCOME IT.

Nowadays, communities have a lot of different ways to communicate with each other, to express themselves. We can see the tendency toward violence among young people. Adults and teenagers can act rudely on social publishing or in the real life. What is the reason for the growth of violence? As I mentioned before, humans have a lot of opportunities to express themselves, as an example is a piece of social news. We have a huge amount of varied platforms to communicate, and to see others' ways of living,
for example
, the relatively new app "Tik Tok". In that ,app society can update short videos of their activity and etc. Using that social media and looking at the comments of the videos I can often read negative words. In my opinion, the main reason for the increase in rudeness is envy. Social news is a place where we can upload our best photographs and the most memorable days.
However
, it is just some moments and, usually, we don't live like on our websites, we are just pretending and making the visuality of growth we want to have. Not all human beings understand that fact. Seeing others having what you wanted makes us question ourselves- "what's wrong with me?". Adults are starting overthinking and become jealous of others.  After that, we became sick of another's "ideal life" and that gives us the desire to write negative and rude phrases. The crowd start behaving violently toward each other.
Nevertheless
, we all should accept that ,sometimes, life on social networks is fake. If we all will receive
this
fact, society become more tolerant and patient.
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