The charts show what ik graduated and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college. Summer is the information by selecting and reporting main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar charts illustrate how many graduates and postgraduate

students

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did part-time jobs, voluntary

work

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further

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study, or went unemployed excluding full-time

work

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after, they left the university in 2008, in the UK.

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, the most popular destination for both university graduates and postgraduates was

further

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studies and the least went into voluntary

work

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. The destination of post-graduate

students

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also

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showed a similar pattern to what graduates did after leaving the university. In terms of destination of graduate

students

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in the UK,29665 of

students

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continued

further

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study and it was the largest group

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, the lowest group of

students

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did voluntary

work

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at 3500,

showed

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showing

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a significant difference between the counts.

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, the number of

students

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who went on part-time

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and end up with unemployed depicted nearly similar values at 17,735 and 16,235 respectively.

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while

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, most of the post-graduate

students

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continued

further

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study at 2725, the fewest number of

students

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did voluntary

work

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, which was 345.

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, the

second

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most count of

students

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who went into a part-time job was 2535, and the quantity of unemployed post-graduate

students

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was slightly lower than part-time employees, which was 1625.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

192 words

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The charts show what ik graduated and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college. Summer is the information by selecting and reporting main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Some people think that computer games can be detrimental for children's health. Others think that they can be great for education. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Most countries spend large amounts of money on weapons to defend themselves though they are not at war. Some believe those countries should spend the money to help poor countries. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement?

In many countries, the number of animals and plants is declining. Why do you think this is happening? How can this issue be solved?

Please elaborate on your current physical and mental health, including any dental or oral treatment, medical interventions, and mental health therapy or counseling. *