There have been major advances in technology over recent decades and this have led to significant improvements in peoples live. To what extend do you agree or disagree?
Technology advancement over the years had imparted
in
many ways to Human life. While some persons agree on Change preposition
apply
this
, others disagree . This
essay will examine both point
of view and why I believe in the former.
On the one hand, those who are against the significant improvement of technology advance in Change to a plural noun
points
peoples
life have some Change noun form
people's
Add a hyphen
well-founded
well founded
reasons. Add a hyphen
well-founded
Firstly
, Development
of more dangerous Correct article usage
the Development
equipments
. Change the wording
equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
This
is due to the fact that more researchers have been enhanced since they have all the necessary information and access needed to invent harmful weapons like Bombs , Guns among others. This
is making it Correct your spelling
easier
easer
to learn through short Correct your spelling
easier
video
whereas ending up Fix the agreement mistake
videos
in
putting so many Change preposition
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life
at risk of death. Replace the word
lives
Secondly
, it lead
to early exposure to most teenagers on the use of modern facilities like gas , irons etc. Change the verb form
leads
This
Correct pronoun usage
These
are
home use and as much, extra care should be taken on Change the verb form
is
it
usefulness, which most adolescent may not have Change the pronoun
its
the
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apply
aware
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awareness
on
its usage causing Change preposition
of
fire
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a fire
at
homes if roughly Change preposition
in
handle
.
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handled
Furthermore
, the supporters of this
technology
advancementReplace the word
technological
has
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have
it
upside. One major reasonChange the pronoun
its
,
is Remove the comma
apply
it
effectiveness in modern medicine and treatment. Change the pronoun
its
Scientist
over the years found it difficult to diagnose some deathly Fix the agreement mistake
Scientists
disease
like cancer, HIV and Diabetes but with the innovations of some machines used today , it has become possible to come up with x-ray, Tests , chemotherapy and drugs for the cure and treatment of Fix the agreement mistake
diseases
this
disease . in addition
, Telecommunications
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the Telecommunications
industries
is waxing strongly in communication unlike before in some parts Fix the agreement mistake
industry
on
African Change preposition
of
were
you have to Correct your spelling
where
stands
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stand
the
line to make phone calls Correct article usage
apply
but
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apply
now a days
with the inventor of phones people can easily reach out to their Correct the word
nowadays
love
ones .
In conclusion, Replace the word
loved
although
they are diverse views opposing the uses
of machinery in daily activities by mankind. In my option, I believe it has more positive Fix the agreement mistake
use
benefit
suppressed Fix the agreement mistake
benefits
it's
negative ways Correct your spelling
its
base
on Wrong verb form
based
it
impartation in medicine and applied in telecommunications industries at large.Correct pronoun usage
its
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