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Do you agree with the following statement? Good teachers are more important to a child's development than good parents. Use specific details to support your argument.

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Education is the most important thing and forms the foundation of a successful life, where teachers play the key role in educating their
students
 for better life and future.
Therefore
, in my opinion, I completely agree with the statement that a good teacher is more important for a child's development than good
parents
. I think
this
 way for two reasons, which I will explore in
this
 essay.
Firstly
, as an initial point, I would like to say that faculty have a
lot
 of incredible qualities among which giving knowledge to their
students
 through education is the most significant one, since
this
 form the base of a good life. Of-course
Parents
 matter a
lot
 for the development of the child but
study
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the study
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 environment the
students
gets
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get
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 in their academy is totally a different thing.
For example
, my friend's daughter
study
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studies
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 only at school, she hardly studies at home and the reason is their faculty. In her school faculty always give assignments to
students
, which they can complete in class along with
others
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students
. A good educator
know
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knows
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 how to make their
students
 learn in an intriguing way.
Secondly
 is
the
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patience, a good educator always
have
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has
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 a
lot
 of patience, since they manage
lot
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a lot
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 of
students
 daily, they know how to manage children and how to keep them busy in learning
the
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apply
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new things daily.
For example
, I remember when I was in
institute
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the institute
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 I used to do a
lot
 of fun activities at the academy and at home. My
parents
 sometimes got angry with me for
such
 behaviours but I remember my teacher never gets angry
on
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 me,
instead
 she used to give me some work
such
 as writing an essay, solving puzzles, or anything related to learning. When I got busy with work I tend to forget to do any mischievous activity in class. In conclusion, I believe that Knowledge and patience are the two best qualities a good tutor has, which out-stands the behaviour of good
parents
 as well.
As a result
, I concur that a good lecturer is more important to the development of a child rather than a good parent.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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