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Nowadays young people mostly learn by reading books or watching movies and TV shows, rather than personal experience. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your knowledge and experience.

#people #books #movies #tv
The earth of Internet sensation has impacted our lives so much that we use online platforms to learn every new skill,
for
example
, watching popular TV Shows on Over The Top platforms in which we have personal interests and reading
books
 on the kindle of our favourite authors or watching the movies. In
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essay I'll express my views on how learning new skills is advantageous online or through personal experiences. The decline in the number of attendees in the public discussions or long debate sessions truly reflects that individuals are showing less interest to go out in nature and develop new skills. Rather, they have started using the alternatives which are the contents available on the Internet,
for
example
, Netflix and Amazon Prime, they provide so much material for different genres which
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 can choose and learn by watching them. Reading
books
also
 provided
people
 with more knowledge about the
world
example
, how the human mind works, how to handle
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, how to get rich etc. Time has become so fast that
people
 want to learn everything so quickly that they don't want to live 10 years of their
life
 to know the challenges which might come in
life
 and how to deal with them.
Instead
, they would want to learn all those things with just online videos or textbooks and be aware of the things before. The virtual
world
 is the new normal, after the Covid-19 the
world
 has become so isolated that
people
 have started learning all things online,
for
example
, how to exercise at home, how to cook food at home, attend webinars of ted talks, online school classes etc. With
this
 availability of everything around ,
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 the crowd have started becoming lazy and stopped engaging with
people
 outside their house. Youtube has so much free content on it that society can start learning anything anywhere from fixing a phone issue to
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 or learning how to meditate. Social media platforms have
also
 taken place of the old times when there
use
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 to be
no
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 Facebook, Instagram extra and folk would live their lives and learn new experiences with time. But now the
world
 is more of Artificial technology where even the Roberts have
also
 been taught the growth decisions which is wrong or which is right. If humans can make Roberts that can do their work and save time and money
then
 how can
people
 not get adapted to the technologies which can teach them more new
life
 lessons. In the
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end I think that it's true that
people
 can drift from personal experience learning towards new sources of learning through Movies or Tv shows or Reading
books
 and which is not giving them the best of the experiences but showing them only the part of the story. Every person has to go through their bad or good times on their own, the
books
 can give them the idea on how to react if the situation comes but not tell the way which could fit their
life
. In the ,end the personal experience will give them the best taste that they would have not seen or read anywhere.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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