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Today more countries import food from different parts of the world. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this trend

#countries #import #food #parts #world #trend
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Nowadays in , the bazaar there are more
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 from other
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 than local
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 . Some people think,that it would be better if supermarkets sold just local
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. I consider that
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 point of view is not correct and in
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 essay I will discuss why I think so. In some ,
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 there are some problems with growing ripe delicious
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 and without the
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 imported from overseas, people in these
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 could not enjoy sweet
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 and get the necessary dose of vitamins for each person.
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, in the UK there is not enough sunshine for gardening and
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 is why they should buy some
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 from Spain and Poland.
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,Uzbekistan is an inland country and
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 there are few fish
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 in shops and just imported sea
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 save Uzbek people from the deficit of iodine in organisms. A
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 major reason is that the economics of a lot of
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 depend entirely on the export of
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products
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. Some
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 grow too many
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 and vegetables ,
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 in some other regions governments cannot grow enough
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 to feed the population of the country, and the
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 trade between
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 is a very nice method to earn money for the exporter and to solve some feed problems for the importer.
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, the economics of Uzbekistan directly depend on the export of
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 to Russia.
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,not a main but significant reason is that
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 can share their own foodstuff culture due to snack export.
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 is very important for some
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 to spread their traditions around the world. In conclusion, I think that supermarkets should be stocked with import
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 the retailers and supermarket chains should not forget about local
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products
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 and sell them too.
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