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Some people say that children should be involved in making schools' rules. Some argue that adults should be in charge of making rules. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

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A section of society holds a belief that youngsters should
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 take part in creating school's limitations, others believe these are
adults
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 who are responsible for the education process .
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why
children
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 are involved in making institution's
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 is that when
children
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's propositions
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 become accepted by the teachers and taken into account, young generations feel proud .
As a result
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 , not only do they obey the
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 ,but
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 make other pupils do the same . Another considerable reason for suggesting
children
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 for making
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 is that if they make
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 by themselves they respect them and follow them sincerely .
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 a school , a survey they know the fact that the students follow more regulation
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 prepared by them
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 of authority .
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 , others think that the decision-making power is only given to
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 not to
children
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 as the
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 are making
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 by considering all measurements
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 as safety and encouraging an educational environment .
Furthermore
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 , hardly do
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 have the ability to see as
children
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 have the ability to see the big picture , as mature people and make
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 based on a holistic approach . so,
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 why people argue that teachers and other
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 should
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decisions
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. For illustration ,
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 school teachers,
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 do not focus on all aspects and they make rules by seeing in few directions.
To conclude
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,
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 some people think that
children
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 follow rules made by themselves and
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 respect the regulations of their own
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laws
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 . I believe that
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 should take
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 as they
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 all things in mind when they are working on limitations.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • responsibility
  • accountability
  • engagement
  • relevant
  • reflective
  • critical thinking
  • decision-making
  • experience
  • long-term implications
  • consistent
  • professionally considered
  • lenient
  • biased
  • discipline
  • order
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