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Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a negative or positivedevelopmen?

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In recent times, many
countries
 have become similar because of the
availability
 of their
products
 around the world. In my ,opinion
this
 is a negative development because it not only affects a
country
's
uniqueness
 but
also
tourism
.
Firstly
, every
country
 has their own culture which makes them unique from other
countries
, like Paris is popular for its paintings and India is popular for its food culture. The
Availability
 of these
products
 may affect their
uniqueness
 and
also
 their
tourism
. The majority of people visit other
countries
 during their holidays, and research shows that 70% of the tourists like to visit with their families. The main reason for visiting other
country
 is to see their culture and the
products
 which are not available in their own
country
,
however
, if all these
products
 are available in every nation, the tourists lose their interest and avoid travelling,
therefore
, it affects the
tourism
 of the
country
.
Secondly
, the main reason for the
availability
 of these
products
 are online market, sellers from e-commerce are selling these
products
 online and anybody around the world can buy them at the tip of their finger. Sometimes these
products
 aren't real and some sellers are fooling the consumers by selling them duplicate items.
However
, people should trust more on the local shops of a particular
country
 , before buying their
products
, and the government of every nation should take some serious action for the safety of their
products
 and their
uniqueness
. To conclude, the
availability
 of
products
 from other
countries
 may affect its
uniqueness
 and
tourism
 as well, I recommend that government should take some strict actions and protect their
products
 for online sellers.
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