Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is positive or negative development?

Nowadays, many goods that are produced by any country in the world are
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is the similarity between countries. I believe
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resemblance has some benefits for many people. In the past everything that
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in every country
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used in that region due to transportation problems and transfer information problems, but in the
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in calm when we want to go abroad without any stress like for making food, cars.
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a number of people may believe,
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are at risk and it causes the un employee is growing ,the ensuing drop in
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welfare of them. In conclusion, I believe, the similarity is
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idea and it is one of the ways for developing and globalization, and it reduces the stress
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immigration .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • diversity
  • homogenization
  • cultural assimilation
  • global connection
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • consumerism
  • standardization
  • westernization
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