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People who travel to another country to live, work or study for a period of time often suffer badly from homesickness. Why is it? What are the best ways to reduce this problem

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Over the past few years, travelling abroad in order to find an appropriate job or obtain higher education has significantly increased.
Although
this
 trend has had significant growth,
people
's emotional problems may cause problems for them. There is a number of solutions which can be effective to solve their homesickness.
To begin
 with, leaving the country, family and friends with all achievements to develop life quality can be considered a tough decision. In
this
 case, many
people
 should separate from their old parents which may have some pressure on them, because they may think over about their parents' health condition. Another issue is friendship. After many try to look for a close friend leave him or her and their memories are always hard for
people
 who immigrate to another country.
Therefore
, these groups of
people
, especially in the
first
 month, have emotional damage which may be caused by their decisions. There are many solutions to overcome the homesickness problem.
Firstly
, it always is recommended to join some community to find
people
 which have things in common.
For example
,
people
 who are willing to play squash can join to squash club to meet new
people
 in order to build up new friendships.
Secondly
, these days, by developing technology, making video calls with family members and friends can be done which helps
people
 to rescue their missing.
Finally
, the destination countries may have some interesting places which can be consumed as a great opportunity to acquire different and fascinated points about their culture or history which can be an effective way to decrease their mental tension. In conclusion, I believe that, whereas travelling to another country can be considered a tough decision for
people
 who are willing to reach a better life in some aspects, many ways can be done to reduce their homesickness feeling.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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