(Livia) Your manager has asked you to arrange a party for a colleague who is leaving the company. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter – Suggest a suitable date and time for the party – Recommend a venue – Propose the food and entertainment options that should be available.

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Dear Livia, I am writing to you to inform you that I have been trying to arrange a venue for our colleague who is quitting his job. After I spoke with our team, I have decided to have a party 12th of October. Because

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most of the workers available night time which is a great time for the party as well. There are two options for us to decide

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place.

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, an Italian restaurant called Bravo in Pyrmont at night time with a gladiator show after the meal.

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restaurant has great pastas and pizzas which people compliment a lot.

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, the gladiator show will be enjoyable for our staff.

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, Turkish food

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Turka at Crown Street. That restaurant's food is one of the best tastes in the town.

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, they do not arrange any show or party after the meal. If we go with Bravo, we will have to choose pizza or pasta with red or white wine. If we decide to go to

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Turkey

, the only option is just Turkish food with traditional alcohol of Turkey. Please do not hesitate to contact me if any

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information is needed. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours sincerely, Atilla Zey

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8 paragraphs

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

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Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

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