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People should focus more on solving problems related to the future, and should not spend time thinking about the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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It is undeniable that there are many problems we may have to deal with in the
future
. It is
agrued
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argued
agreed
 that focusing to solve
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problems
prolems
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problems
 in relation to the
future
instead
 of spending time
to think
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 about the past. I believe that both sides can have positive or drawbacks in our lives.
This
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first
 hand, solving problems is an
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ability
ablitity
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ability
 for
people
 to survive in
this
 competitive society,
also
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 very important in our
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future
furture
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future
. If
people
 are able to settle problems more focus and efficiently, there could be
a
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huge
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benefit
benefits
benetits
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benefits
 in our communities. Imagined if you were a boss, would you willing to recruit
a
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employee
employees
empolyee
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employee
 who can solve a problem in many ways or the one who only can talk about their past and
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 nothing.
On the other hand
,
people
 can fix the issues because some solutions are from
others
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others'
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 experiences or past. It is necessary to spend some time
to reveal
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 mistakes we have
been
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made and
then
 learn from them. If
people
 do not know the wrong thing they
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 before, they may never
been
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 avoid
and
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making the same mistake. Only learning from the past to allow
oursevles
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ourselves
 growth and be a better one in
future
.
For instance
, my previous colleague.
she
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always gets
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 from customers but she never learns why they are so angry
about
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. After
few
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 months later, she got fired because she didn't know and realize the problem was
,
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 and didn't learn from the past.
Therefore
, I think that
sometime
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 thinking about the past can
be
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help
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 to
adviod
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avoid
this
 kind of situation. In conclusion, In spite of
problem solving
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 is a vital skill to the
future
 but shouldn't too
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focus
focused
 on it.
However
,
people
 should
also
 spend time
for
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revealing themselves and learning from the past in order to
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built
build
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build
 up a strong ability.
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